Reading: please read to the end of page 75

Homework/Assignments: First Journal Response is due on Friday, December 3rd.  Tomorrow, we will mark the questions for pages 1-15.  See Monday’s post for questions.


Edit your paragraphs on the short story, “The Goalie”.  Final copy due tomorrow.  Here’s the editing check list.  Be sure to double space your final copy.

  1. Does your essay start with a hook or general statement?  If not, don’t forget to add one.
  2. Does your introduction have a sneak preview?
  3. Is the introduction more than 3 sentences?
  4. Scan your essay for “I”, “You”, “Your”, “We”, and “Our”.  Remove them (unless they are a part of a line quotation).
  5. Scan your essay for contractions like “can’t” and “don’t”.  Remove them and replace them with the full words (i.e. cannot or does not”)
  6. Check your quotations.  Are they integrated?  If you are not sure, click here.
  7. Is your essay written using present tense?  It should be!
  8. Use persuasive language in your essay.  Click here for a list of persuasive and transition words.
  9. Use strong vocabulary.  Use a thesaurus to find the most powerful words.  If using MS Word, right click to find a list of synonyms! 
  10. Did you write a paragraph or an essay?  Remember, the task was to write one paragraph.  Less is more!